Yo, me again, this will be the last time ill ask if my rap lyrics are legit, here's something of mine that is going to be apart of my 1st song. (if you guys say itsgood enough.) tell me where i could do better or if its good. thanks (:

"Yeah, I'm rapping with this f**kin' s**t mic,

but I'm not giving up rap yet,

Even though I still might.. I'm sitting here writing, Tryin' to get this s**t right.

I'm 16 years to f**kin' old, I wish I could change that calendar and never let this life unfold.

But I can't so I'll see what it has to hold.

All I'm hoping for is riches n gold but I know in the back of my mind that it's just darkness n cold.

Only a small number of us hit that huge f**kin' motherload."

hit me back..